The Summer Sky (my title)

This poem was an assignment, given to us years ago, in Poetry School. We were supposed to shorten, and ‘tighten-up’, the original, so to speak! The author is unknown.

Here’s the original

Here’s mine

The deceit of light mocks the summer sky

as warm earth turns to stone

beneath my naked feet.

sun-dotted breezes blessed my smile.

a bitter wind stings the tender birds

till they can no longer warble,

and the cruel empty night


my desolation.



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